2014년 9월 28일 일요일

Research: 9/29 Who is Albert Einstein?

Source:
Who is Albert Einstein?
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Albert_Einstein

My Thesis
in order to love someone successfully, you should keep these two terms: to keep pace with your lover, and to communicate constantly with him.

What I hope to learn from this source:
I want to find the information bout the person who showed the theory which I suggest as the basic reason of my assertion, thereby provide the background knowledge for readers.

Notes

  1. Albert Einstein was a German-born theoretical physicist and philosopher of science. He developed the general theory of relativity, one of the two pillars of modern physics. He received the 1921 Nobel Prize in Physics for his services to theoretical physics, and especially for his discovery of the law of the photoelectric effect.
  2. His intellectual achievements and originality have made the word "Einstein" synonymous with genius.

Final Thoughts:
What do I have to write in my narration except this?

First Draft Narration

What will be used mainly in this essay were formed by Einstein, a German-born theoretical physicist and philosopher of science. He received the 1921 Nobel Prize in Physics "for his services to theoretical physics, and especially for his discovery of the law of the photoelectric effect", and his intellectual achievements and originality have made the word "Einstein" synonymous with genius.


Here the concepts:
1. Relativity of simultaneity: Two events, simultaneous for one observer, may not be simultaneous for another observer if the observers are in relative motion.
2. Time dilation: Moving clocks are measured to tick more slowly than an observer's "stationary" clock.
3. The laws of physics are the same for all observers in uniform motion relative to one another (principle of relativity).


This is the brief 
theoretical background of my thesis. Then let's turn our eyes to the importance of communication in long-term romantic relationship. Many people have accentuated the necessity of interaction with the significant others.
Psychologists stay that the intoxicating feeling of being in love lasts only about 18 months to three years at most; however, a study conducted by psychologist Bianca Acevedo and biological anthropologist Helen Fisher found that it's possible to keep love alive in a long-term relationship. The key was continuous communication.
Other studies have proven that a good relationship offers medical benefits of lower stress levels, reduced risk of Alzheimer's, and even improves cancer survival rates.
Furthermore, Joshua Uebergang emphasized the importance of communication, saying "Communication is the relationship. Communication connects people. You can do neither when communication is nonexistent." in his essay. And Marie Willsey also mentioned on it like this: "How do you keep romance alive? If there's a special person in your life, you know how important good communication is to staying close and keeping the fires of passion burning. Good communication skills are essential, whether you've been together for two months or 32 years."


2014년 9월 14일 일요일

Research: 9/15 Divorce rate in Korea, three times more than 10 years ago

Source
Divorce rate in Korea, three times more than 10 years ago
http://article.joins.com/news/article/article.asp?total_id=273898

My Thesis
in order to love someone successfully, you should keep these two terms: to keep pace with your lover, and to communicate constantly with him.


What I hope to learn from this source
I want to suggest the statistic ground which can support my opinion: contemporary men do not know how to love a long while and desirably.

Notes
이혼도 92년에는 535백쌍에 그쳤지만 10년 만에 세배 가까이 늘었다.(2002)

Final Thought
It can be indicator which shows that contemporary men do not know how to love a long while and desirably, but it has limitation because this survey is confined to only Korea.

First Draft Introduction

As the material circumstances of people has been improved, the mental values becomes considered as important. Among a variety of emotional values, most people consider love to be the greatest and most powerful one. The importance of love has been emphasized throughout the human's history. Mahatma Gandhi(1869 - 1948) said that power based on love is a thousand times more effective and permanent than the one derived from fear of punishment. Also Jim Morrison mentioned about love like this - "...That's what real love amounts to - letting a person be what he really is." The power of love makes people unbelievably stronger, inspired, incredibly happy, deathly sorrowful, and even takes their own lives or murder others. Undeniably, love exerts a strong influence on human. Therefore, people should know how to cultivate the emotion to the true meaning by practicing it, not considering it as a temporarily consumed type.
Nonetheless, most contemporary men do not seem to know how to love someone a long while and desirably. They tend not to be able to improve the emotion of love, and the tendency of the people is towards take it lightly. According to an article about social indicator in Korea,(2002) divorce rate in Korea is three times more than 10 years ago. Under this circumstance, I suggest that in order to love someone successfully, you should keep these two terms: to keep pace with your lover, and to communicate constantly with him. This essay analyses why you should keep pace with your lover scientifically. Then it explores the necessity of communication, and proper conversational skills.

Research: 9/15 Mahatma Gandhi, Jim Morrison Quotes

Source
Mahatma Gandhi, Jim Morrison Quotes
http://izquotes.com/quote/68096

My Thesis
in order to love someone successfully, you should keep these two terms: to keep pace with your lover, and to communicate constantly with him.

What I hope to Learn From This Source

I want to give my view in a way that carries conviction by quoting a famous saying from some great men.

Notes

1. Jim Morrison: That's what real love amounts to - letting a person be what he really is
2. Mahatma Gandhi: power based on love is a thousand times more effective and permanent than the one derived from fear of punishment.


Final Thought
I think that I will be able to use those quotes in the introduction, because introduction should be made to attract the audience.

First Draft Structure: Outline

1. The introduction, which warms up the audience, establishes goodwill and rapport with the readers, and announces the general theme or thesis of the argument.

I will highlight the importance of mental values, and especially the power of love by quoting Mahatma Gandhi(1869 - 1948) and Jim Morrison, the famous figures, to give my opinion convincing and public confidence. After describing how 'love' is influential to human life, then I will point out today's tendency, in which modern people do not know how to last romantic relationship and just take it lightly, presenting higher divorce rates in Korea(2002). Finally, I will emphasize the importance of enlightening people under this context, and claim that the answer is keeping face and communicating.

2. The narration, which summarizes relevant background material, provides any information the audience needs to know about the environment and circumstances that produce the argument, and set up the stakes-what’s at risk in this question. In academic writing, this often takes the form of a literature review.

I will provide brief theoretical background of my thesis, the theory of relativity, especially the three parts: relativity of simultaneity, time dilation, and principle of relativity. Then I will have readers turn their eyes on the importance of communication in long-term romantic relationship by presenting a study conducted by psychologist Bianca Acevedo and biological anthropologist Helen Fisher, and quoting Joshua Uebergang and Marie Willsey.

3. The confirmation,which lays out in a logical order (usually strongest to weakest or most obvious to most subtle) the claims that support the thesis, providing evidence for each claim.

First of all, I should emphasize that the most important key to last romantic relationship for a long while is 'interaction". After that, I will describe modern society in which people are not loving each other at the same time. Using Einstein's the special theory of relativity, I will claim that unless people do not keep pace with their partners, their time zones would be violated, and present the lyrics, 'Slow Motion' by Karina, accentuating the importance of keeping pace with one another. Also, I will highlight the importance of communicating again, then provide the ways to communicate successfully from the views of various figures who already studied the ways. The steps will be divided into three: to make it habit of using "I" or "me" statements, to listen to your partner, to keep the peace.

4. The refutation and concession, which looks at opposing viewpoints to the writer’s claims, anticipating objections from the audience, and allowing as much of the opposing viewpoints as possible without weakening the thesis.

Because this essay takes an unconventional view and was being developed uniquely, plenty of people are expected to refute my position. I think one of the probable counterarguments is that this one has scientific error. I will write that the opponents may claim that the theory of relativity cannot be applied on romantic relationship, but this argument is not accepted in this case, because the reason I suggested the Einstein's theory of relativity as the rationale of this essay, of course, was the purpose to give a convincing and novelty in my argument, using deployment method called analogy.

5. The summation, which provides a strong conclusion, amplifying the force of the argument, and showing the readers that this solution is the best at meeting the circumstances.

I will close this essay with accentuating the context, in which the modern society is becoming more and more deserted as it becomes progressive, emphasizing the importance of the spiritual values spreads. I will point out the jeopardy when the trend to downplay the spiritual values ​​in society becomes rampant, and the members of society are unable to utilize them properly, that society will be full of violence and cruelty, eventually sliding into catastrophe. After that, I will write that I sincerely hope that more people know and practice the ways I suggest, making the society emotionally richer, and more desirable community.